Peers' response

1.the title

 a.The title is too specific. Replace 18 children with kindergartners if you want to make the issue general.

   b."Truth" is not specific. You should talk more about the news content in the title.

→(REJECTED) I agree with the advice that the title is too specific. But, replacing 18 children with kindergartners cannot make the title better. As for the second advice, the purpose of using "truth" is to make readers track down what the truth is. So, in order to connect the title with the subtitle, I make it a question.(The subtitle is the answer.) It is not specific any more but still arouses readers' interest toward my news.  

2.the subtitle

  Adding "out of our imagination" before the subtitle will be good.

→(REJECTED) "Out of our imagination" is a good phrase to raise readers' attention. But I think "beyond huge expectation" is more appropriate for my subtitle.

3.the structure

  Show the children's response first and then explain it.

→(ACCEPTED) It can raise readers' curiosity and makes them keep on reading.

4.words choosing

  Replace "are not needed" in the last paragraph with "are not necessary" because the latter is more professional.

→(REJECTED) There is no difference between "are not needed" and "are not necessary." Besides, the former seems more concise.